In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel tor a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this

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In some places around the world, youngsters are supported to find some
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and experiences
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as working or travelling after they graduate from high school.
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will provide both advantages and disadvantages of
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the options.
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with, some benefits of youth are encouraged to work or travel. Young people can find the way by themselves before
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about their future.
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, they will know what they want to be and
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to do it in the future.
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parent
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can support them, they will courage to do something without fear.
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, some students
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to learn
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a lot of money and they need to have financial support from their parent.
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, there are some disadvantages of working or travelling after finishing
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high school. Some people believe that it will be
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their
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time and
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to study
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university
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, in Thailand, the older generation
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to
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their child
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graduate from
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university
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and
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employees who graduated from the high range of
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25 years.
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, some youth decide to
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to
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the culture in some
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firms
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. In conclusion, some people believe that supporting
young
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generation
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finds
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some knowledge or experience by working or travelling is the best way that they can grow up. From my point of view, encouraging youngsters can find themselves
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they like to do and want to be is the best way because
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is their life. The parent cannot support them for their whole life.
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