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In most countries fast food is becoming cheaper and more available. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is certainly true that fast
food
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 is becoming cheaper and more available in a
lot
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 of countries, some
people
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 say that
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 phenomenon bring a
lot
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 of benefits for human.
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 accepting that, i believe that fast
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 which price is decreases is more likely to have a harmful impact and bring a
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 of disadvantages. On the one hand, there are several benefit of fast
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. A common advantage is that fast
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 make
people
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 easily get full, because it's contain a
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 of fat
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 as oil, butter or sweet like sugar, honey. With a low budget, they can
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 afford an hamburger or hotdog if their want to, since it cost effective. Details: it is obvious that McDonald is a representative chain of fast
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 restaurants, they have variety of
food
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 that include hambuger, chicken nugget, ice cream... which contain a
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 of oil, sugar, fat as an ingredients in the dishes, those create popularity and brand for the store, which make them famous and become the biggest chain in fast
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 category
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, the low
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 have them to increase the consumers and have a
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 of regular custumers. Another positive aspect is that fast
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 is tasty, since it include a
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 of ingredients, those
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 really flavorful, which consumers feel satisfied and craving the
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 they make. Since it become cheaper, the fast
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 chain have high revenue and profit. Othe other hand, i am of the opinion that the aforementioned advatages are at the expense of greater drawbacks. One obvious disadvatage is that the decrese in
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 of fast
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 causes
people
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 to abuse it, because it is convenient and delicious, causing many
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 to become addicted to those harmful foods.
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 a newspaper page, it show a data about consumption in
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 which fast
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 take 50% of the figure, when the journalist interview some
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, they have an identical answer which is they love the taste of fast
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 and those are cheap, convenience, suitable for their timetable when they craving some thing help them full but
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 increasing the appetite. Another negative affect is that those
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 is harmful to
people
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 heath, it make
people
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 cause many diseases,
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 as obese, dibetes... Example: America is a country reach the highest milestone, became the country with the highest percentages of
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 causing obese, it is noticeable that walking on USA street, it easily to see a person who overweight, the cause to
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 mainly because of fast
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. America is famous for the amount of fast
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 is plentiful, with reasonable
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, so it's not suprising why the Usa citizen have causing obese. In conclusion, it seems to me that the potential dangers of low
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 fast
food
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 are more harmful than the possible benefits
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Nutritional value
  • Obesity epidemic
  • Job creation
  • Disposable income
  • Culinary diversity
  • Processed foods
  • Economic stimulus
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Sustainable practices
  • Public health
  • Consumerism
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