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In most countries fast food is becoming cheaper and more available. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

#countries #food #development
It is certainly true that fast
food
 is becoming cheaper and more available in a
lot
 of countries, some
people
 say that
this
 phenomenon bring a
lot
 of benefits for human.
While
 accepting that, i believe that fast
food
 which price is decreases is more likely to have a harmful impact and bring a
lot
 of disadvantages. On the one hand, there are several benefit of fast
food
. A common advantage is that fast
food
 make
people
 easily get full, because it's contain a
lot
 of fat
such
 as oil, butter or sweet like sugar, honey. With a low budget, they can
also
 afford an hamburger or hotdog if their want to, since it cost effective. Details: it is obvious that McDonald is a representative chain of fast
food
 restaurants, they have variety of
food
 that include hambuger, chicken nugget, ice cream... which contain a
lot
 of oil, sugar, fat as an ingredients in the dishes, those create popularity and brand for the store, which make them famous and become the biggest chain in fast
food
 category
Besides
, the low
prices
 have them to increase the consumers and have a
lot
 of regular custumers. Another positive aspect is that fast
food
 is tasty, since it include a
lot
 of ingredients, those
also
 really flavorful, which consumers feel satisfied and craving the
food
 they make. Since it become cheaper, the fast
food
 chain have high revenue and profit. Othe other hand, i am of the opinion that the aforementioned advatages are at the expense of greater drawbacks. One obvious disadvatage is that the decrese in
prices
 of fast
food
 causes
people
 to abuse it, because it is convenient and delicious, causing many
people
 to become addicted to those harmful foods.
For instance
:
according to
 a newspaper page, it show a data about consumption in
food
 which fast
food
 take 50% of the figure, when the journalist interview some
people
, they have an identical answer which is they love the taste of fast
food
 and those are cheap, convenience, suitable for their timetable when they craving some thing help them full but
also
 increasing the appetite. Another negative affect is that those
food
 is harmful to
people
 heath, it make
people
 cause many diseases,
such
 as obese, dibetes... Example: America is a country reach the highest milestone, became the country with the highest percentages of
people
 causing obese, it is noticeable that walking on USA street, it easily to see a person who overweight, the cause to
this
 mainly because of fast
food
. America is famous for the amount of fast
food
 is plentiful, with reasonable
prices
, so it's not suprising why the Usa citizen have causing obese. In conclusion, it seems to me that the potential dangers of low
prices
 fast
food
 are more harmful than the possible benefits
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Nutritional value
  • Obesity epidemic
  • Job creation
  • Disposable income
  • Culinary diversity
  • Processed foods
  • Economic stimulus
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Sustainable practices
  • Public health
  • Consumerism
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