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Consumers are faced with increasing numbers of advertisements from competing companies. To what extent do you think are consumers influenced by advertisements? What measures can be taken to protect them?

It has been reported that consumers today encounter more
advertisements
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 than they used to. In my opinion,
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 phenomenon has brought about tremendous disadvantages to
customers
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 as it prompts them to spend more money. The
customers
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,
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, should be protected by practising self-control. In the past,
people
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 were faced with
advertisements
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 on a few occasions. Back
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, mainstream
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,
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 as television and newspapers, were some of the only ways for companies to introduce their products and persuade
customers
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 to buy them.
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, if
people
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 had seen a wanted item through a television or newspaper advert, they would have had a long time before they could see it again and
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 may reconsider whether the product was necessary.
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,
advertisements
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 have changed significantly in the
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 few decades and have appeared in every social
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 platform
people
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 access. As
customers
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 constantly use those
media
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 websites, they have to face the product adverts many times and eventually succumb to the urge to buy them.
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, Vietnamese youngsters have spent more money on unnecessary, low-quality items because of pop-up
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 on their Facebook pages. As most of those
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 usually do not violate any national law, I believe governments cannot interfere with the way companies sell their goods.
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,
customers
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 may have to learn self-control and budget management themselves to avoid the adverse impact of increasing adverts.
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, they could reduce their hours online to prevent advertisement encounters. If they cannot use social
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 less, they must shut down adverts as soon as they see them.
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, financial considerations should be taken to decide if a product is worth buying before its purchase. In conclusion, facing rising
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 leads to more expenses among
people
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. I believe that in
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 case, self-discipline and deep consideration should be practised to mitigate unnecessary expenditure.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • advertising campaign
  • celebrity endorsement
  • psychological manipulation
  • emotional appeal
  • targeted advertisement
  • digital marketing
  • social proof
  • peer review
  • consumer trust
  • brand loyalty
  • misleading advertisement
  • government regulation
  • consumer protection
  • media literacy
  • ad-blocker
  • privacy settings
  • informed choice
  • critical thinking
  • marketing tactics
  • consumer awareness
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