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It is important for people to take risks, both in professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantage of taking risks outweight the disadvantages.

#people #risks #lives #advantage #outweight
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Risks
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 are a must in both professional
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 and personal
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.
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which most people are debating over as some are willing to go the extra
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mile
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take
 those
risks
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 for more gains whilst others are not. Taking
risks
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 is something we as humans are unable to avoid as in every scenario there is something to give up and to gain. In a
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 it is considered gambling but by doing so we can always grow and adapt to the opportunities we have taken.
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, I will be starting off with
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lives
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. Professional
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is
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 something we have
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 for since graduating from any form of school.
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, by doing so we are
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continuously
 tempering ourselves to reach newer
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 and most
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 trying to earn much more money.
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, we can earn a pay raise without the need
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 some form is risk but
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extremely miniscule chances. Most of the time we are required to take on some risky project to get
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 pay raise
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 jobs on the line. It does not
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necessarily
 mean if we do not do
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 job we are going to lose anything but if the braver person does complete the task given, there is a higher chance of him growing to higher positions whilst you are still in that same position.
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, for personal
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, there is not really much risk involved in
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. The only risk is most probably picking who to spend your life with. To sum it up,
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 are very
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disadvantageous
 as you might lose out on something but I believe if
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 are handled properly the advantages would most
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definitely outweigh
 the disadvantages.
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