In many countries around the world, rural peoples are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Nowadays, there is an ongoing trend of
people
moving out of their hometowns in the rural areas
to persue
careers in the more populated Correct your spelling
pursue
cities
. This
tendency is negatively affecting many countries around the world especially
the developing ones. I think Add the comma(s)
,especially
this
phenomenon has a deleterious impact on the quality of life, the economy and the environment of both the rural and the central areas
, and it will continue to do so as long as most well paid
jobs and opportunities are more distributed in the bigger towns.
In the more populated Add a hyphen
well-paid
cities
, when an influx of people
move to work, study and live there, accommodations become scarce and more expensive. This
is clearly seen in slums where the number of housings
is Fix the agreement mistake
housing
conversely
proportional to the number of people
. It will also
bring about more criminal activities like theft and drug abuse, as well as
more prevalence of contagious diseases. Moreover
, environmental pollutions
Fix the agreement mistake
pollution
are
worsened in busy Correct subject-verb agreement
is
areas
where people
consume more products and release more wastes
. An obvious example would be the PM 2.5 air pollution Fix the agreement mistake
waste
that is
becoming a serious health threat in many capital cities
with unsolved traffic congestions.
On the other hand
, when young
workforce is leaving the rural Add an article
the young
a young
areas
, a stagnation in suburban development will ensue. There would be less educated people
living in the poorer areas
to improve their towns in many aspects, including educational systems, jurisdiction systems, and security. Furthermore
, there would be less labour to carry on agricultural work which is the major source of income in the faraway provinces.
To conclude
, I believe that too much of
Change preposition
apply
migrational
flow to the bigger Replace the word
migration
cities
contributes many
social problems both in the major Change preposition
to many
cities
and the rural areas
. This
problem should be emphasized and solutions should be made to distribute more jobs and opportunities to people
in the country,
so that they can have good quality of life no matter where they live.Remove the comma
apply
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