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Some children spend hours evryday on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you this is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, there is no denying that adolescents
use
 their mobile phones for a long period of
time
 on a daily basis.
This
 trend is phenomenal in many countries around the world.
This
 behaviour contributes to many negative impacts on both the
children
 and societies, as I will discuss in
this
 following essay. The tendency of youngsters
using
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 more smartphones may stem from the feasibility of obtaining the devices since phone companies are making cheaper, varied, and more attractive communication products,
as well as
 broader coverage of internet connections. We can see that
children
 are allowed to own cell phones at younger ages, and sometimes their phone usage is not properly supervised by their guardians. Many times teenagers stay up very late at night playing online games, watching series, or chatting with their friends.
This
 not only affects the younger generation but
also
 the communities. There are numerous drawbacks
from
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this
 issue.
Firstly
, spending too much
time
 on mobile phones worsens
children
's physical and mental health.
This
 is observed in many schoolchildren who experience chronic eye strain, poor attention span, and obesity
due to
 a lack of outdoor activities.
Secondly
, being online for too long can deprive
children
 of the
time
 that they should normally
use
 for studying.
Lastly
, the young may be exposed to uncensored
contents
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content
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 that can lead to problematic behaviours, including pornography, bullying, and violence.
To sum up
, an increasing number of
children
is
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 spending too much
time
 on their smartphones and I strongly believe that
this
 affects them negatively in multiple ways. Parents, schools, and governments have to come up with strategies to control and guide our younger generation to
use
this
 technology appropriately,
as well as
 make online society safer for them to
use
.
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