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The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern life style. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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The advent of the
food
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 industry, which made
easy
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it easy
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as
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and
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 suitable for the busy work schedule has more benefits,
such
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 as
reduce
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time
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the time
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 for cooking and least
power
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 consumption, which are included numerous negative effects,
such
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 as
health related
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 disorders,
as well as
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 high expenditure, and
this
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aspect
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 to justify ho advantages superior to the disadvantages. On one hand, there are numerous pros are
consisted
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consist
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 of
this
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 concept.
Firstly
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, less time for preparing meals,
when
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 someone wants to arrange
own
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their own
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 meals in
short
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a short
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 duration,
due to
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 their busy
life
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, there many
instant
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 foods are available in the market to purchase, which
reduce
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reduces
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 their
preparing
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preparation
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 time.
Secondly
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, as people tend to buy readymade and
instant
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food
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 ma decrease the usage of electricity or gas for cooking, which
influence
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influences
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 to low thee
expences
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expenses
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 on
power
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 bills.
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, with the higher usage of
junckey
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junk
 and
instant
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food
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 in most developed countries have been diminished
power
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 bills almost every residence.
Although
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 there are numerous pros included in
this
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 phenomenon, a few drawbacks are available, which drastically affect
to
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the
individuals
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individual's
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life
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, which
life
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 related disorders,
such
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 as diabetes and heart diseases,
which
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that
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 not recover during
the
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apply
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life
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.
Moreover
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, buying
chemical added
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chemical-added
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food
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 might increase the expenditure on meals even though they are
convenience
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convenient
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 to prepare on
daily
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a daily
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routing
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route
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.
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, consuming
ready–made
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ready–made
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 foods often
has
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have
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been
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apply
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influenced
negative
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negatively
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 way on
economy
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the economy
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 of the majority of families in developing countries,
such
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 as Asian countries.
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,
cons
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the cons
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 are supposed to be
strong
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stronger
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 than
benefits
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the benefits
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 of
this
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 system.
To conclude
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 vast number of people, who
spend
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have
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 busy
work-schedules
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work schedules
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consume more
instant
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food
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 as they convenient,
due to
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 less time-consuming for preparation.
In addition
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,
the
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with the
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 least
power
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 usage, they would suffer from many adverse effects,
which
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apply
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influence
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influencing
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on
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apply
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their
life
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,
such
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 as disease and more expenses, which convince us that utilization of
this
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 procedure
for
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in
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 the long run may impact negatively
are
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overshadowed by the positive developments.

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