The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main fitures and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main fitures and make comparisons where relevant
The diagram gives data about the alterations of West Park Secondary School
since
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from
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its first condition in 1950 to the latest condition in 2010.
Overall
, It is an obvious fact that the playground and the main road
was
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were
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retained
while
some buildings were constructed in three various years.
According to
the diagram, in comparison between 1950 and 1980, the most eye-catching change was that houses were taken down to build
car
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a car
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park area and science block of
school
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the school
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building.
Moreover
, in 1980, another striking modification was
sports
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the sports
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field that was constructed
instead
of farmland next to
playground
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the playground
a playground
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.
In
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This
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this
year, the main road
was remained
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remained
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the same.
In addition
,
comparison
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a comparison
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between 1980 and 2010 years was taken into consideration, the most eye-catching modification was car park area was enlarged
while
sports
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the sports
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field was diminished.
Furthermore
,
main
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the main
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road, playground field, the buildings of
school
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the school
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and
science
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the science
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block were retained in 2010 too.
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