The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main fitures and make comparisons where relevant
The diagram gives data about the alterations of West Park Secondary School
since
its first condition in 1950 to the latest condition in 2010.
Change preposition
from
Overall
, It is an obvious fact that the playground and the main road was
retained Correct subject-verb agreement
were
while
some buildings were constructed in three various years.
According to
the diagram, in comparison between 1950 and 1980, the most eye-catching change was that houses were taken down to build car
park area and science block of Correct article usage
a car
school
building. Add an article
the school
a school
Moreover
, in 1980, another striking modification was sports
field that was constructed Correct article usage
the sports
instead
of farmland next to playground
. Add an article
the playground
a playground
In
Change preposition
This
this
year, the main road was remained
the same.
Change to the active voice
remained
In addition
, comparison
between 1980 and 2010 years was taken into consideration, the most eye-catching modification was car park area was enlarged Correct article usage
a comparison
while
sports
field was diminished. Correct article usage
the sports
Furthermore
, main
road, playground field, the buildings of Correct article usage
the main
school
and Correct article usage
the school
science
block were retained in 2010 too.Correct article usage
the science
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