The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

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The three diagrams demonstrate what changes have been made at West Park Secondary School, over a 60-year period, from 1950 to 2010. Interesting to notice that the main building of the school hasn’t been changed at all,

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surrounding areas have completely changed their purpose of use. In 1950, we can observe that schools, houses, playgrounds and farmland occupy almost approximately the same size of territories. Turning into details, the playground took the biggest part of the land. Regarding the situation in 1980, houses were replaced with new car parks and a science block.

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, the farmland has been transformed into a sports field. On the

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map we could see that the car park ended up with the biggest part of all the territory as the sports field and playground significantly became smaller in size

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, Westpark Secondary School’s area has experienced lots of changes since 1950. More importance has been given to car parks in contrast to other school facilities.

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The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation,such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money.others argue that ıt ıs better to try and improve such situations

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