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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Other think that adult brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, all around the world, many people are discussing the topic of the happiest time of life.
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 some people think that advantages to being a teenager,
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 think that the advantage of being an
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 exists.
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, from my point of view, I think the second perspective is the most persuasive for the reasons discussed below. On the one hand, as far as being a teenager is concerned,
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, to some extent, especially in modern times, no matter where in the world you live, you have no responsibilities resulting in the
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 that you can do whatever you want without consequences.
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, you don’t pay for taxes or rent
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 that you living at your parent's place, resulting in not being responsible.
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, there are reasons that being an
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 has many advantages. First and foremost, by and large, you can be free and have a choice to go everywhere you want
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 that you are independent, just leading to the
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 that you are courageous.
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, when you are an
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, you can travel around the world by yourself.
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, and most importantly for me, you can be independent and can afford whatever you want in order to have a correct salary.
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, if you decide to buy a new phone, on account of the
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 that you working, you can pay for it. In conclusion,
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 some people think of the advantages of being an
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, others hold a different opinion.
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, in my opinion, I think the second perspective is the most persuasive, to some extent, for the abovementioned reasons.
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