Many feel that going to the gym is the best way to stay fit. Others think there are more effective methods Discuss both views and your own opinion.

Whether going to the

gym

or doing other methods is the best

way

to stay is a highly debatable discussion point. I contend that the

gym

is a place that can help

people

to

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stay fit and improve their mental

health

, despite those who believe that the other methods can

also

be a more effective

way

for anyone

that

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who

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wants to lose weight and stay fit. It must be understood that the

gym

is one of the most useful places for

people

to have a healthy lifestyle. It should be self-evident that gyms have the specific type of equipment and

the

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trainers that can help

people

to do exercises in the right

way

. There

also

have the programs and advice

come

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that come

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from the trainer to help

people

achieve their goals in their mental

health

. By

keep

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following

these advice

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,

people

not only lose weight and stay fit, but

also

improve their

health

.

However

, there

are

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a part of

people

who think that going to the

gym

is not only an effective

way

to stay fit

,

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but there are

also

many different methods for anyone to keep fit. They argue that doing yoga, ballet or

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exercise at home costs less money and is more effective

instead

of the

gym

.

This

is a credible point, but doing yoga and ballet

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more patience and the peace of mind to do,

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exercise alone at home is even less effective because the exercise

people

do can be wrong or not suitable for their current

health

.

Consequently

, it can cost

people

more time and money than going to the

gym

but will not bring any achievement.

While

critics argue that going to the

gym

is not the most effective

way

to stay fit, proponents including myself emphasize the significance of the

gym

in the social and daily life of

people

.

Therefore

, it should have been shown that the rate of sickness in

people

have been

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reduced

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reduced

since the

gym

appeared