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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
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There is a popular public debate among
people
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 in
society
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.
Due to
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 the massive improvement that human
life
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 has experienced in many
aspects
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, common sense has
this
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 belief that we have too many
choices
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 and many more options than before.
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 essay will discuss
this
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 view and evaluate it in different
aspects
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 regarding the given topic. In some
aspects
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 of
life
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, human beings have much more
choices
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 than before.
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, we can choose what to wear, in what colour and in different kinds of materials. Our ancestors didn't have any alternate above leaves as clothes.The industrial revolution has made
life
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 much easier for
people
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. Manufacturing everything in companies makes a wide range of options for different objects. As mentioned it can bring up so many
choices
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 for
people
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 in
society
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, but it can
also
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 limit their
time
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. To expand the idea described in the
last
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 part of the first paragraph, it can be said that
however
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,
choices
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 in many criteria have become much more than before, but some criteria, which will be described, can make some imitations. Having so many options and making decisions for them will gain so much
time
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 from us and result in some limitations in the
time
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 that we have.
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, strict daily plans that
society
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 has been forcing on
people
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 reduced the alternatives that human beings can have in their daily lives and spending their
time
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 on that. Personally, I think
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 a vast range of everything gives us many
choices
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 to have,
society
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 and
this
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 wide range of
choices
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 may lead to some limitations in our lifestyle and how to live our lives. So in a nutshell, it can be said in some
aspects
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 of
life
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,
people
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 have too many
choices
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 to make nowadays.
On the other hand
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, these kinds of
choices
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 remove some other
choices
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 from their
life
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.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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