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The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons

The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons
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The presented diagram provides a comprehensive comparison of the total
scores
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 collected by 3 teams in four distinct seasons.
Overall
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,
Team
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B
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 had the highest
scores
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 among the other 2 teams over four given seasons.
On the contrary
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, the total
scores
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 of
Team
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 A and
Team
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 C remained below
Team
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B
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. Upon
further
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 examination, in 2002,
Team
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B
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 collected the highest results around 82
points
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 compared to other periods. During 2003 and 2004, the record of
team
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B
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 gradually decreased to 63
points
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 and 43
points
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 respectively.
Otherwise
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, in 2005, there was a bounce back where
Team
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B
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scores
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 obtained a significant increase which accounted for 55
points
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. Turning to the other remaining data, it is evident that 3 out of 4 seasons (2002, 2003, and 2005) depicted
team
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 A as the lowest
scores
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 gained which accounted for under 11
points
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.
In addition
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, there was a huge gap of around 79
points
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 between
Team
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 A and
Team
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B
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 in 2002.
However
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,
Team
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 A with 35
points
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 successfully dethroned
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team
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Team
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 C with 12
points
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 as the second-highest
records
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record
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 collected in one season.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words scores, team, b, points with synonyms.
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