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Today’s teenagers struggle with many social issues. Some people think that is because their parents are spending more time at work than at home. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays youngsters have difficulty with many social problems. Some people believe that it is related to their
parents
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 who are spending more
time
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 working rather be at home. I partially agree with
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 statement and will elaborate in the following paragraphs.
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 with, teenage problems are not uncommon and have always been a huge topic since the bygone era,
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,
due to
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 globalization youngsters'
issues
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 cannot be ignored anymore especially if they involve parental consent.
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, globalization causes society to be more active in the work lifestyle in order to improve the quality of their lives.
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, it leads to
parents
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 spending more
time
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 at work and sometimes neglecting their children.
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, teenager have a limited
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 to spend with their
parents
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 either to ask for help or guidance. On the flip side, social
issues
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 that teenagers face can be found from different factors too and not mainly from their
parents
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. To elaborate, still related to the aforementioned statement,
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 globalization and the advancement of social media, youngsters like to spend more
time
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 on the internet nowadays which can be harmful to their mental health.
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, people like to share unreal lifestyles for teenagers to follow, and when it does not live up to their expectations, it can cause social
issues
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. With that, social
issues
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 can come from a variety of factors and not merely from the
parents
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' figure. To summarize,
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 teenager facing a difficult situation with social
issues
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 might be because of the neglect of their
parents
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, sometimes different factors
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 have a huge impact on their struggle. From a firsthand perspective, I could say both views have a continuous discussion. There are no right or wrong answers to
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 statement.
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