in many countries’ schools have severe problems with student behavior. What do you think are the cause (problems)of this? What solutions can you suggest?
Nowadays, it is observed that many
teachers
at schools are facing difficulties with teenage behaviour. These problems might be a mental health
issue or a lack of parents
’ and teachers
’ engagement. It is a fact that this
will lead to serious issues for their future. However
, the potential solutions to tackle this
situation are support
from teachers
and parents
, as well as
mental health
support
services.
There are several reasons why students may act out. First of all, there might be a lack of parents
' and teachers
’ engagement with adolescents. For example
, a lack of discipline and communication from parents
as well as
teachers
will lead to a bad attitude, resulting in them becoming wilder and out of control. In addition
, mental health
issues may be the main problem causing this
circumstance to get worse such
as ADHD (Attention-deficit hyperactivity disorder), which can be a trigger for aggressiveness.
Nevertheless
, there are some potential solutions prominent to reduce these problems which include discipline from parents
, understanding and clear communication from teachers
. In particular
, mothers and fathers could spend more time with their kids to understand more about their emotions. Moreover
, mental well-being support
services are also
available in hospitals and health
centres. For instance
, if children have symptoms of ADHD, parents
should send them to a psychologist so the doctor can suggest the best medication to help them remain in control.
To sum up
, students' behaviour is more concerning nowadays, this
can be remedied by involvement and discipline by their parents
and teachers
. Additionally
, students can seek out support
services to address underlying conditions.Submitted by sunnyrogle22 on
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