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Many feel that going to the gym is the best way to stay fit. Others think there are more effective methods. Dicuss both views and give your opinion.

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many
people
 think that the best way to have
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 body is going to the
gym
.
However
, others believe there are more effective methods. In my opinion, I
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incline
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the
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 latter idea. I will discuss both views in
this
 essay. On the one hand,
people
 must agree that going to the
gym
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 a lot of benefits to stay fit.
Firstly
, at the gyms there are many tools for
people
 can use to practice
such
 as treadmills, dumbbells or
Gym
 Bikes so
people
 can do any exercise they want with the
tool
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 they need.
Secondly
, there are a lot of
people
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 many
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to stay
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 fit.
For example
, we can see that
people
 who go to the
gym
 usually know what exercise they need to do, how to do it correctly and what food they should eat to have
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balance
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diets
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 and they can help us if we do not know something.
On the other hand
, I still think that there are more effective
mothods
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methods
 to have
fit
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 body.
For
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people
 can do
excercise
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exercise
 at home and play
sport
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 usually because those activities make
people
 burn and reduce
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unnecessary fat and have good health.
Moreover
, if
people
 know how to balance their diets through
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the
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knowledge from others
have
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 experience on the internet they still can stay fit. In conclusion, I believe that it is unnecessary to go to the gyms to stay fit. Because there are still a lot of
others
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 methods for
people
 to
choice
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 to available with them.
Although
 going to the
gym
also
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 one good idea.

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