Many feel that going to the gym is the best way to stay fit. Others think there are more effective methods. Dicuss both views and give your opinion.

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many
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think that the best way to have
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body is going to the
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.
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, others believe there are more effective methods. In my opinion, I
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latter idea. I will discuss both views in
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essay. On the one hand,
people
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must agree that going to the
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a lot of benefits to stay fit.
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, at the gyms there are many tools for
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can use to practice
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as treadmills, dumbbells or
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can do any exercise they want with the
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they need.
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, there are a lot of
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many
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to stay
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of staying
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fit.
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, we can see that
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who go to the
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usually know what exercise they need to do, how to do it correctly and what food they should eat to have
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diets
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and they can help us if we do not know something.
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, I still think that there are more effective
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methods
to have
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body.
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people
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can do
excercise
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exercise
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usually because those activities make
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burn and reduce
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unnecessary fat and have good health.
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, if
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know how to balance their diets through
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the
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knowledge from others
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experience on the internet they still can stay fit. In conclusion, I believe that it is unnecessary to go to the gyms to stay fit. Because there are still a lot of
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methods for
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to
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to available with them.
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going to the
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also
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one good idea.

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