Some people say watching TV is a waste of time. Do you agree or disagree? Make an essay justifying your opinion.

Nowadays as technology advances, the studies behind human brains and
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addictions have become profound.
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why series, films, cartoons, etc., are much more attractive than in the past. Some people believe that watching
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is a waste of
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, but some see the possibility of navigating a world apart from reality, as a refugee. In
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I will discuss why I agree that TVs kidnap our productive
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and fear of new generations impact. In
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place, when we sit to watch anything on the screen we get absorbed and most of the
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do not realize how long we lost from our day. It happens with websites too. What the industries are bringing to us, is a fake sensation of slow pace
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our mind blows with the excess of hormones released inside our body, making us more addicted to what we are watching. I doubt you have ever heard a person say "Today I will relax, stay at home and watch some series to rest" and
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not realize how much the brain worked and was forced.
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, shows tired feelings when the purpose of staying at home is other.
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, do you know how TVs, smart devices, websites and online games, impact our kids? Because I do not know much and I am scared of what is waiting for us in the near future. As
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passes we notice that parents have less
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with their children because of work and to compensate it or for just chill for a few hours put the child in front of a
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when the kid has only a few days sometimes.
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these kids spend watching
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than ever and nobody says a thing about it. The consequence of
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unstoppable action we will see in a few years ahead. As a mother, I avoid
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type of attitude in our lives and it has been working. In brief,
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essay tried to elucidate the important attention we need to have with
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whole new world that was thrown into our hands in an attempt to make us feel more fulfilled
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of the running seasons we are passing through. Personally, do you want to calm down? Go read a book, go to study because knowledge is something that nobody can take off you
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of the cable of your
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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