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Many feel that going tp the gym is the best way to stay fit. Others think there are more effective methods. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

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The majority of
people
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 think that going to the
gym
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 is the most effective way to stay healthy.
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, others believe that there are more dissimilar ways to stay fit and it is not essential to go to the
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 and
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 writer certainly agrees with
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 way. The discussion of the essay will be argued below. When
people
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 go to the
gym
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, they can hire their fitness coach to teach and correct their exercise skills to avoid an injury and they can help
people
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 maintain a balanced diet in a day or a month.
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, doing exercise with a professional coach can save your stamina and your time
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 having more experience and planning the most suitable routine for your schedule.
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, going to the
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 and hiring a coach can be cost exorbitantly expensive. When
people
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 want to use the equipment in the
gym
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, they have to pay an extra fee to use those facilities.
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, the specialized gyms are mostly located in the city centre or some modern residential area.
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, the
gym
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 can be too far for
people
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 who want to go to the
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. The writer is of the opinion that going to the
gym
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 can have lots of benefits
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 as having enough necessary equipment or you will have a trainer to teach and prevent you from having injuries
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 you are doing exercises.
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,
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 not the only way to keep fit,
people
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 can cycle or run around their town to stay healthy and do not need much equipment. In conclusion,
people
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 can have more advantages when they come to the
gym
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. But sometimes it is quite expensive for
people
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 so they can stay at home to do exercise by watching videos on the Internet or they just go outside and start running.
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