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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbian island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbian island between 2010 and 2017.
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The line graph illustrates the many people
travel
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travelled
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 to a particular Caribbean
Island
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 between 2010 and 2017 .The horizontal axis shows the years and the vertical axis explains the
numbers
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number
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 of
visitors
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.
To begin
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 with ,in 2010 ,below 0.5
million
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visitors
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 were staying on cruise ships .In 2011 ,
increasing
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an increasing
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were
Verb problem
number of
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visitors
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on
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to
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ship
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the ship
a ship
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.
In
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From
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 2011 to 2012 ,the
figure
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 was
decline
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declined
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 and steadily rose over the five years to reach
at
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apply
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2
million
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 in 2017 .Next , below 1
million
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visitors
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 were staying on
island
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 in 2010 .That was gradually increasing
in
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from
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 2011 to 2015 .
In
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From
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 2015 to 2016 ,the
figure
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was
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apply
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decline
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declined
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 but in 2017, 1.5
million
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 people
were staying
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stayed
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 on
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island
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the island
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.
In addition
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, the total number of
visitors
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figure
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 began at 1
million
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point
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points
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.That
figure
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 was climbed in 2010 to 2015. The following years 2015 to 2016, the
figure
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 was reducing and rapidly rose over the next year to reach 3.5
million
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 in 2017.
Overall
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 ,3.5
million
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visitors
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 were visiting on
caribbian
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Caribbean
island
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 from 2010 to 2017.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, visitors, million, figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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