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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.
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The given bar chart illustrates the amount of yearly revenue for families in the years of 2007, 2011 and 2015. The unit of measure is in millions.
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, there were 5 groups represented in the chart, starting at less than $25,000, and the maximum amount was more than $100,000. The largest number of households’ annual income was the
group
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 of more than $100,000 in 2015
while
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 the smallest one was the
group
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 between $75,000-$99,999 in 2011. At first glance, it is clear
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that except for during the year
of
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2011, the major groups of $100,000 and more reached the highest annual income in 2007 and 2015 by almost 30 and around 35 million families, respectively.
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, the yearly earning
group
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 between 25 thousand to nearly 50 thousand in 2011 had led the largest number of families at approximately 30 million which was
also
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 twice higher than the
group
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 of $75,000-$99,999
in
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each year.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic landscape
  • Household income
  • Economic health
  • Income brackets
  • Trends
  • Inflation
  • Unemployment rates
  • Job market
  • Income disparity
  • Housing affordability
  • Access to education
  • Quality of life
  • Economic policies
  • Income inequality
  • Mitigating
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