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The diagram below show the plan of a library in 2001 and 2009.

The diagram below show the plan of a library in 2001 and 2009.
#show #plan #library
The provided
map
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the information regarding the plan of a library in 2001 and 2009. In an overview, it is
lucid
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apply
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clear that there are plenty of changes in the year
of
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apply
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2009 but, both the year entrance was
same
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the same
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. At a fleeting glance,
South
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the South
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side
 was
entrance
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the entrance
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 of
ground
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the ground
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 floor in 2001 and right
side
 of
entrance
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the entrance
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 had stairs and
front
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the front
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side
 had
libraries
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a library
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 desk.
Moreover
,
west
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West Side
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side
 has history class and
self help
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self-help
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. In the centre of
map
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the map
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,
had
Verb problem
there were
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a
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apply
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eight tables and
right
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the right
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side
 had
newspaper
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newspapers
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 and periodicals.
Further
 analysis, In 2009, west
side
 of
map
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the map
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 the area
divided
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was divided
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 into five parts
they
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They
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 had constructed laws, economics, kitchen,
fiction
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and fiction
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 classes. East
side
 of the
map
, films and
dvd
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DVD
 had
constructed
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been constructed
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at
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in
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place
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the place
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 of newspapers and
periodiares
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periodicals
 and South-East corner newly made computers. In the
center
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centre
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 of the
map
, opened a children's area and constructed
a
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apply
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four huge tables and
rest
Correct article usage
the rest
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 of the
map
 was similar.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words map, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 6 times.
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