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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.
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The map illustrates the design of Central Library’s infrastructure before
two
 decades which is changed currently.
Overall
, the library
had
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 gone
with
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 multiple changes
as
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 the development of technology. In the past local library
has
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different
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 outlook as compared to current changes.
To begin
 with, twenty years ago, entering
in
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the central
area
 there were
two
 tables and chairs and on the left and right sides adult fiction books sections were
their
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 respectively.
However
, presently the middle
area
 is made empty and on both opposite sides are developed with new amenities which are the section of
adult
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an adult
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 fiction book was on left side only, with
addition
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 of information desk and three self-service machines,
whereas
 on
right
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 side it modified to the
area
 of all reference books. On the other end, all
the
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four corners were transformed after
two
 decades with new facilities in
digital
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 way like
lecture
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a lecture
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 room and computer room
instead
 of
children’s
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a children’s
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 book part and reading room.
Moreover
,
currently
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 a café
and
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on
other
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the other
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 side
area
 section of
storytelling
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 event and
children’s
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a children’s
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 fiction book section with
two
 sofas were established respectively.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • layout
  • shelving
  • reading area
  • reference section
  • encyclopedias
  • dictionaries
  • circulation desk
  • transactions
  • digital media
  • computer stations
  • multimedia rooms
  • café area
  • social environment
  • leisure-friendly
  • expanded reading areas
  • user experience
  • comfortable seating
  • children's section
  • engage younger readers
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