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Today, more and more people prefer to communicate online rather than face to face. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or negative development? Justify your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is apparent nowadays
communication
 via
cyber space
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had
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 a greater number when compared to face to face among an individual's
desire
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. From my
prospective
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,
these way
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 of
communications
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offer
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 both positive and negative development. Even though it can
provides
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 more channel of
communication
, it
also
lead
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 to isolation and online fraud issues. Contemporary groundbreaking technologies have adapted to peoples' lives, the obvious example of
this
 is the mobile phone, which is occupied by most
people
 in the world. Not only is it a tool for instant
communication
 by messages, but it
also
 provides a call or even FaceTime, where
people
 are enabled to have a conversation with one another anywhere anytime without a time-consuming
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distance. To illustrate, if a pupil who has studied in secondary education abroad, they are able to overcome
this
 obstacle by using the internet.
Therefore
, Online can minimize remote
communication
 issues and keep
people
 in touch with their loved ones for these reasons it attracts more users.
On the other hand
, it is
undenieable
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undeniable
 that there are
lot
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 of
people
 who
prefered
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prefer
 to interact with their peers online which can
leads
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 to detrimental circumstances.
For instance
,
people
tent
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 to engage online more than
meeting
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 one another in person which can
be results
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 in isolation from
the
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society.
Furthermore
, Online fraud is
considerate
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 outcome
from
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this
 as well,
for
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 example at present there are many Online dating
appllication
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applications
, where
people
 can seek their
relationship
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relationships
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 from
that
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those
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platfroms
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platforms
platform
. On top of that it is straightforward to have significant others from the internet, In most cases, those candidates have been avoiding their real identity to persuade others to do unusual things which can lead to a life-threatening and illegal case.
Thus
, online can
also
 discourage
advantages
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the advantages
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 of
communication
 online. In conclusion, it is true to say that online has certainly developed
communication
 between
people
 and brought many positive impacts, but at the same time it can
also
 influence drawbacks which should be noted that it is crucial to consider and be aware of online friends.
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