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The three pie charts illustrates degrees granted in different fields at the national university in the years 1990,2000 and 2010.

The three pie charts illustrates degrees granted in different fields at the national university in the years 1990,2000 and 2010.
The three pie charts
illustrates
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illustrate
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 degrees granted in different fields at the national university in the years 1990,2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, there
have
Verb problem
are
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 four categories. Computer science, Medicine, law and business. One of the key changes over
this
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 decade is the formal rising
firstly
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 for 10% ,
secondly
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 by
5per
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5 per
cent
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 in faculty computer and science. The next is
a
Correct article usage
the
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 faculty of business
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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 had a drop
for
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of
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 15% in years
by
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from
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 1990-2010. Between 1990 and 2000, there was a 5 per
cent
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 increase in medicine.
In addition
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, medicine experienced a 5 per
cent
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 decrease between 2000 and 2010. Law fell from 15
percent
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per cent
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 to ten
percent
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per cent
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 in 1990-2000 and It increased by fifteen per
cent
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 again after 10 years.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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