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Developments in tourism offer very little direct benefit for residents who live in these areas. To what extent do you agree?

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Nowadays
people
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 tend to visit more places because of their attraction towards
tourism
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. It is argued that developments related to
tourism
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 offer minimal benefits to the
people
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 who belong there. In my opinion, I would completely disagree with
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 statement because it provides benefits for the local
people
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 in the way of selling products and it promotes opportunities for small businesses around the locality.
To begin
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 with, most of the nations primarily depend upon the income from
tourism
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 which attracts most visitors from outside countries. Incorporating development ideas like refurbishments or renovation in visitor attraction places will have a positive result in great remuneration.
For instance
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, On pilgrimage journeys,
people
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 will spend more to collect memorable gifts from the localities to keep that forever as a remembrance that would benefit the local shops, daily wage
people
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 and the government in the form of indirect tax . So, investment in developing the area which acts as a tourist spot will definitely yield good money.
Secondly
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,
people
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 who come on a long journey will always search for accommodations which
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 comfortable and will need a taxi or cab to roam around and ,
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moreover
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 they might need a good
travel
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 guide to explain in detail about the speciality in the area. In
such
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 cases, there is no doubt that small businesses get involved .
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,
people
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 who want to
travel
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 to more locations will acquire a taxi service which directly benefits the
travel
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 agency business.
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, each and every person around the locality will directly or indirectly benefit from tourist activities undoubtfully. In conclusion, I wholeheartedly agree that innovations in
tourism
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 have vast advantages because they promote local stores for their product sales and encourage small businesses like hotels,
travel
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 guides, and shuttle services which indirectly provide a good income to the government.
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