It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risk outweigh the disadvantages?

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Some individuals argue that it is crucial to take on risky challenges in various aspects of life. From my perspective,

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opinion might bring about some demerits; the merits outweigh the demerits generally. On the one hand, some argue that it is not a proper idea to risk our

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some rational reasons.

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, by taking lots of risks, we sometimes threaten our

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; to illustrate, when some individuals try to experience some challenging sports,

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as paragliding, they sometimes face some fatal consequences, like crashes that can even lead to a painful death.

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, some risky and ambiguous investments, which usually offer a high amount of profit, can

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cause dreadful losses or even complete bankruptcy;

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some people are not eager to have

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a lifestyle.

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, a vast majority of highly successful achievers owe their prosperity to their risk-taking characteristics.

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, most of the highly successful entrepreneurs, have risked all their money and background career to work on an unclear idea, with no straightforward and predictable result. To exemplify, Steve Jobs devoted all his wealth and endeavour to producing the first computer-based animation

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everyone was against his idea. His gamble resulted in a huge success with the ‘Toy Story’ animation.

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, the happiest people are those who try to make the most of their time in their

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and accept risky opportunities to make the most of their journey in

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world.

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, the statistics show that seniors who are on the verge of death claim, that they regret not being a crazy risk-taker and missed the exciting opportunities that happened to them. In conclusion,

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taking risks might have negative consequences, I consider

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concept as an advantageous one, because mainly, we are not able to live our dreams or live the happiest of our

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without risking what we have.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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313 words

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It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risk outweigh the disadvantages?

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

These days, in many countries, fewer and fewer people want to become teachers, particularly in secondary schools. What are the reasons for this? How could more people be encouraged to come into the teaching profession?

"Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up." To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think young people should be required to have full time education until they are at least 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that a country will benefit greatly by a high percentage of young people going to universities. Others argue that it only leads to a higher unemployment rate. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.