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The given graph shows the main sources of energy for USA in 1980 and 1990

The given graph shows the main sources of energy for USA in 1980 and 1990
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The two above pie charts present the majority of
resources
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 for the USA in 1980 and 1990. In 1980, Oil stood in a dominant position
that is
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 42%.
Gas
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 has the second storage in all
resources
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 which contributes 26%. Meanwhile, the amount of coal was slightly lower than natural
gas
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 which is 22%. The rest 10% of the
resources
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 were split evenly by hydroelectric
power
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 and nuclear
power
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. In comparison with 1980, the oil consumption dropped to 33% in 1990. Meanwhile, natural
gas
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 almost stayed still and supported a quarter of sources.
In contrast
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, coal and nuclear
power
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 have an obvious increase which are 4% and 5% respectively.
Last
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 but not least, green
power
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 did not change from 1980 to 1990.
Overall
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, oil and natural
gas
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 promoted major usage of
resources
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 in both years, and the development of green
power
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 and nuclear
power
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 was still in the initial phase in 1980 and 1990.

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