Improvements in health, education, and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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For developing
unpreviledge
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unprivileged
countries
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, education, health and business improvements is vital. These
nations
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should
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received
receive
help from richer
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countries
governments
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. I disagree with
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statement and I think poorer
countries
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have to improve their living standard and facilities.
Firstly
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, the
governments
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of developing and poorer
countries
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should be aware of their
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problems. By implementing some job opportunities
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as building new factories and local stores, and
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individuals to work in these locations, most
of
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the
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families would gain
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this
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ability to send their children to school. In order to do that, the literacy rate of society would significantly decrease.
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, constructing some good hospitals in
countryside
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the countryside
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and rural areas and a
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routine
plan for
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all
of
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the
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infants and children could be an effective approach
for
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increasing the health problem in poorer societies. The amount of money which is
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needed
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for building
hospital
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a hospital
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can be spent
of
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taxayion
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taxation
which is given
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the richer group of people
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as
business
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businesses
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mans
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and traders.
However
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, some believe the
governments
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of developed
nations
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such
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as
United
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the United
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states
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and
Britian
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Britain
can avoid
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war in poorer
nations
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and send some labour
forcements
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enforcement
enforcements
, in order to improve the quality of
live
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in these regions.
Although
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this
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could be an effective idea, I think the
concouil
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council
of the developing
nations
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can trade their goods with developed ones.
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, most of the African
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have some
fuels
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mines
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as gas and petrol and some valuable metals
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as gold and silver. If
these kind
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of valuable things trade with the requesters, a good amount of money will enter the country. In conclusion, the
governments
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of poorer
nations
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should be worried about their
citizens
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citizen's
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quality of
lives
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life
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. They can create new job opportunities and
high quality
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hospitals and put their
citizens
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citizen's
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prioroties
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priorities
top
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of themselves .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underdeveloped nations
  • economic disparity
  • global cooperation
  • moral obligation
  • historical exploitation
  • interconnected world
  • economic stability
  • quality of life
  • trade relationships
  • humanitarian aid
  • capacity building
  • dependency syndrome
  • sustainable development
  • bilateral agreements
  • economic priorities
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