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Band 3.5

Some people think it is important to keep and maintain old buildings rather than replacing them withmodern buildings? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays,
lack
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 of
accomodation
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accommodation
 for the increasing population is
a
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an
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 urgent problem to solve. Some
expert
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experts
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 regard
to repair
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repairing
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 the function of old
buildings
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is
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as
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 a better way than
give
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giving
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 the old
building’s
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building
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 way to a new one. In my opinion, even though
keep
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using the old
one
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ones
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 has some benefits, I agree with the opinion
to convert
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of converting
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 them
to
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into
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modern
buildings
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. Plenty of issues about the old
buildings
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 need to be solved. After
be
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being
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 used for decades and
be suffered
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suffering
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 from natural disasters, the structure of the building is already damaged and it is weaker than it was,
in
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 the near future, it might
caused
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cause
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 harmful accidents.
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, In order to maintain its secure function, the payment for maintenance and
repairing
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 will be more frequent and higher. It will end up as a costly and chronic financial expense. The design of modern
buildings
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 can be more suitable
people’s
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to people’s
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demand
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demands
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. Lack of space for living or entertainment facilities for children
are
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is
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the
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a
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 common problem when people
living
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live
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 in a historical building,
however
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, modern design of the building can solve these problems.
For example
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,
designer
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the designer
a designer
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 can construct an apartment for
the
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an
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 area which is crowded and
lack
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lacks
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of
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apply
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empty houses, which can solve the problem of
growing
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a growing
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 population. In general, the potential risks
about
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of
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 the old building and the suitable living area are the reason why I support
to replace
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replacing
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 old constructions with
a
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apply
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modern
one
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ones
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. The latter choice can
gives
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give
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 people a safe, comfortable and convenient place for living.

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