Tourism is an ever-growing industry. what benefit do you think tourism brings to individuals and society?

It is admittedly true that
tourism
is
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statistic
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industry for most
of
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the
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nations but the
tourism
sector is the main income for lots of countries
such
as the UAE, Qatar, and Saudi Arabia. In
this
essay, I will elaborate on my point of view,
how
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individuals and
society
benefit from
tourism
. On the one hand,
tourism
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sector is a profitable business for a nation. It not only help a country's GDP but
also
give opportunity for new jobs for
society
.
However
, The UAE is a successful example for
tourism
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the tourism
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sectors
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sector
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, where continuously GDP growing only for visitors.
As a result
, most
the
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visitors stay
4
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- 5 days, where they spend
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of 10000-10,000 USD. Not only products have an extra tax for
tourism
but
also
food.
On the other hand
,
society
and
people
benefit from
the
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sectors
such
as local
people
's shops, restaurants and hotels, where visitors visit most of the time and buy products. Other side,
society
's individuals
able
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to invest money because they benefit from
tourism
and they are
open
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new organizations that help to create new jobs for
society
people
.
Secondly
, the
tourism
sector helps a
society
of poverty, where
people
are able to good livelihood.
Day
by
day
crime rate has decreased because of new job opportunities for
society
people
.
To sum up
,
day
by
day
most Middle Eastern countries are inspiring other countries to improve
tourism
sectors
.
Tourism
sectors
boost a country's GDP which helps to develop a good
society
and new social opportunities.
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