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international travel and tourism has become easier and more affordable. is this a positive or negative devlopment ?

#travel #tourism #devlopment
Worls
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World
 has become a global village therefor travelling to overseas for work
as well as
 study become more cost friendly and easy for
people
.
This
 scenario
have
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 both pros and cons .
This
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further
 elaborate
both
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the
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views.
To begin
 with ,
First
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the First
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 and foremost significant advantage is that
the
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international tourism and overseas
travel
 boost the economy
for
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of
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country
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the country
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. As more and more
people
travel
 to
foriegn
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foreign
 for work and study eventually revenue will increase
thus
 economy will rise too.
For example
,
Developing
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a Developing
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country
 like India depends on the money
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that come
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come
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comes
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 from tourism industries and tourist places
such
 as
Taj
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the Taj
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mahal
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.
kutumb
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Kutumb
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 minar of
delhi
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Delhi
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.
Secondly
 ,
people
 explore
the
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apply
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new cities and new
culture
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cultures
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as well as
they
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apply
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learn new
language
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languages
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 and skills from overseas
people
. It will eventually benefit them
ad
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and
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 the
country
 in some ways.
Furthermore
,The trade between the countries gets
more
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stronger by the day.
Moreover
,
people
 get
chance
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a chance
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 to explore and enhance their knowledge about various countries by travelling as the rates of
travel
is
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are
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 affordable.
However
thi
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this
 trend has some disadvantages too. There are a plethora of downsides
of
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to
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 international
travel
. To commence with ,
Host
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the Host
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country
face
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faces
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the
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problems like damage
of
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to
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 property and natural sites of
city
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the city
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 by overcrowding. To illustrate, The famous touring destination Bali faces many
challanges
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challenges
due to
overcrowd
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overcrowding
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 and damage
of
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to
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 natural lakes and lake shores. Another point is ,
sometime
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sometimes
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 various
culture
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cultures
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vanished
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vanish
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 because of
world
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the world
a world
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 becoming
global
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a global
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 village.
people
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People
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 follow more
western
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Western
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culture
 and forget to follow their own. To
clear
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clarify
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 that,
people
 from India
following
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follow
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 more
western
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Western
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culture
 as they celebrate
halloween
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 and
valentine's
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day
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Day
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 but
thier
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their
 own festivals.
In
addition
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,addition
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 tourism and
travel
 industries
also
affects
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affect
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 the
enviornment
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environment
 badly
..
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.
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 To recapitulate, by agglomerating all the points aforementioned above, travelling
to
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abroad brings many benefits to individual and
country
such
 as
increase
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an increase
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 in economy and
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the privillage
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privillage
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privilege
 to explore new nations but
positive
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the positive
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 always comes with the negative
such
 as
enviornmental
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environmental
 pollution and
loss
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the loss
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 of various
culture
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cultures
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. I believe
travel
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the travel
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 industry brings numerous advantages
than
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and
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 disadvantages.
Hence
its
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it's
it is
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overall
 a positive development.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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