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international travel and tourism has become easier and more affordable. is this a positive or negative devlopment ?

Worls
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World
 has become a global village therefor travelling to overseas for work
as well as
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 study become more cost friendly and easy for
people
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.
This
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have
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has
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 both pros and cons .
This
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further
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 elaborate
both
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on both
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the
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apply
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views.
To begin
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First
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the First
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 and foremost significant advantage is that
the
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international tourism and overseas
travel
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 boost the economy
for
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of
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country
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the country
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. As more and more
people
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travel
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 to
foriegn
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foreign
 for work and study eventually revenue will increase
thus
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 economy will rise too.
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,
Developing
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a Developing
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country
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 like India depends on the money
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that come
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come
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comes
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 from tourism industries and tourist places
such
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 as
Taj
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the Taj
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mahal
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.
kutumb
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 minar of
delhi
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Delhi
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.
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 ,
people
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 explore
the
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new cities and new
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culture
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cultures
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as well as
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they
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apply
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learn new
language
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languages
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 and skills from overseas
people
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. It will eventually benefit them
ad
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and
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 the
country
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 in some ways.
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,The trade between the countries gets
more
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stronger by the day.
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,
people
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 get
chance
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 to explore and enhance their knowledge about various countries by travelling as the rates of
travel
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is
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are
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 affordable.
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thi
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this
 trend has some disadvantages too. There are a plethora of downsides
of
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to
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 international
travel
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. To commence with ,
Host
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the Host
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country
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face
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faces
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the
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problems like damage
of
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to
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 property and natural sites of
city
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the city
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 by overcrowding. To illustrate, The famous touring destination Bali faces many
challanges
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challenges
due to
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overcrowd
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overcrowding
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 and damage
of
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to
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 natural lakes and lake shores. Another point is ,
sometime
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 various
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culture
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cultures
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vanished
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 because of
world
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the world
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 becoming
global
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a global
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 village.
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people
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People
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 follow more
western
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Western
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culture
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 and forget to follow their own. To
clear
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clarify
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 that,
people
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 from India
following
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follow
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 more
western
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Western
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culture
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 as they celebrate
halloween
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Halloween
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 and
valentine's
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day
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Day
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 but
thier
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their
 own festivals.
In
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addition
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 tourism and
travel
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 industries
also
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affects
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 the
enviornment
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environment
 badly
..
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.
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 To recapitulate, by agglomerating all the points aforementioned above, travelling
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abroad brings many benefits to individual and
country
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such
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increase
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an increase
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 in economy and
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the privillage
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privillage
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privilege
 to explore new nations but
positive
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the positive
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 always comes with the negative
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enviornmental
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environmental
 pollution and
loss
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the loss
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 of various
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culture
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cultures
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. I believe
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travel
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the travel
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 industry brings numerous advantages
than
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and
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 disadvantages.
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its
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it's
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overall
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 a positive development.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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