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Some people believe advertisements have positive effect on people and business while others do not. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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People
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 believe that there is a positive effect of advertising some
products
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 to grow business
as well as
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 to introduce
people
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. I will discuss both views and give examples based on my experience.
To begin
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 with, advertisements have a positive impact not only on the
company
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 but
also
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 on
people
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. The
company
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 looking for the opportunity to gain business value by introducing some of its
products
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. There may be some occasions to obtain new potential customers.
Therefore
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, from the customer's view, it is easy to understand what product the
company
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 sell in the market.
For instance
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, in my
city
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 there is a discount midnight sale in the superstore. The superstore is present through billboards
as well as
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 a flyer. It may gain new potential customers
as well as
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 finances of the superstore.
On the contrary
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, there are negative impacts of using advertising for both
people
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 and companies. The
company
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 has prepared a lot of advertisement budget. The budget fee of advertising is so expensive.
Nevertheless
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,
people
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 may not need advertising for some kind of product. The basic need consumption
such
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 as salt, sugar and vegetables. Indeed, they may have their own preferences and opinions in choosing basic need
products
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. In conclusion, advertisements may be important for some of
company
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 to increase their business valuation and to find new potential customers.
However
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, some of
kind
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products
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such
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 as basic needs may not need advertisements regarding their own food preferences.

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