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Writing Samples
Band 7

A friend you made while you studying abroad has writen to ask you help finding a in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company thd might be suitable for himm/her. Write a letter to this your letter • tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves • say why you think the job would be suitaue for him/her • explain how to apply gor the job

Dear Puneet, Hope
this
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 letter finds you well and thriving. I am writing
this
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 letter to share an amazing opportunity with you because I know that you are looking for a job in London. I remember, when I saw you
last
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 time, you had captured some amazing photographs at a car show. That's why, when I saw the Cameraman and editor job posting, you immediately popped into my mind.
This
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 is the kind of career, I think, you are looking for.
This
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 position will help you make money with your passion. Because you are a skilled photographer, they will surely pay you some extra. The position duties include taking pictures of vintage cars and other missionaries ,
as well as
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 editing them to upload on their website. To apply for
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 position, you will need an experience letter , which I am sure you have from your college.
Also
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, they need two reference letters
along with
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 your two passport-sized pictures. Make sure to have them ready! I hope you will grab
this
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 opportunity. Wishing you all the best. Warm regards, Guri

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content
Fix a wrong word: 'missionaries' should be 'others' or 'other cars'.
structure
Add clear steps to apply, e.g., where to send the CV and what to include.
language
Use short and clear lines. Try to keep one idea in one sentence.
language
Check small errors like 'an experience letter' instead of 'a experience letter' and 'that would suit you well'.
tone
Friendly tone that fits a note to a friend
content
Shows link between job and friend's skill as a photographer
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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