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You have recently moved to a different house. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter -Explain why you have moved - Describe the new house - Invite your friend to come and visit

#house #friend #-explain #visit
Dear John, How are you
!
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 Guess what?
Last
 week, I
have
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moved
in
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 a new house in Sydney! As for the recent
moved
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, I decided to buy a new house after years of renting in the countryside. I wanted to go
in
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 a big city, because
of
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my children, Tom and Lisa,
grown
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 up, and would like to
give
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 access to a better school and social life. They are so happy! So, let me
to
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describe our new house!
First,
and
the
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most important for my wife Tina -- It is in front of the beach! We have a large garden and five bedrooms. The district is very quiet and
ours
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 neighbours
looks
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 so kind! You will love to live there! Anyway, I am writing to you to invite you
for
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 the next summer. You always wanted to visit Sydney, so it ‘s a great occasion for you! I have
place
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 for you and your wife and we
be
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 happy to welcome you and
spare
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 time together! And what do you think about a Fishing trip close to the Opera,
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sound
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 fun! Well, let me know
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your availability for the next summer! Take care! See you soon! Cheers Tony
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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