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Information on the process about producing hydro-electricity is presented in the enumerated diagram.

#information #process #hydro-electricity
Information on the procedure
about
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 producing hydro-electricity is presented in the enumerated diagram. Looking from an
overall
 perspective,
it is clear that
given
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 process consists of multiple steps in order. First of all,
initial
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 state requires water flow from any kind of water pond, but in
this
 current
presentation
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 it is
reservoir
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a reservoir
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.In
second
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the second
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 step liquid frow intakes in penstrock. Moving water creates
physic
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 pressure and causes
turbine
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 to spin,
then
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and then
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moving
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the moving
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 liquid goes under the ground. In the next step,
turbine
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 spins and charges
generator
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,
that
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 is located in
powerhouse
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the powerhouse
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 with energy. The
last
 section appears to be where
generator
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the generator
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 in
powerhouse
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the powerhouse
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 transmits energy to
long distance
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 power lines.
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