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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is commonly accepted that the society and educational system have changed significantly from the old era when it was almost impossible for a girl to study in a university
while
 only boys were allowed to do so. Now a girl can enrol to a university at her wish and merit. In many universities, female enlistment exceeds that of male
students
 in many subjects. I oppose the idea of granting the same
number
 of male and female enlistment in every
subject
 offered in an academy bypassing the merit list. First of all, a university aims to educate people and prepare them for the future and those
students
 will lead the country in the future. If the admission process prioritises sentiments and tries to accept the same
number
 of
students
 from both genders in each
subject
, it would not be a good idea for the country. Rather they should focus on talent and there is no harm if more female recruitment can get admitted to the educational institution based on talent.
Moreover
, the important qualifications are academic performance and value. Here gender issues should not be considered. The equal
number
 of male and female
students
 in every
subject
 is a whimsical view that would deprive many talented males of admission.
Third,
since there is no restriction on the
number
 of female
students
 allowed for an apt, they can naturally compete in a fair fight and show their competence rather than being pitied by a policy. Again, not all males and females are equally interested in studying every accountable, they have their own choices. Implementing an equal
number
 of male and female
students
 in each
subject
 would take away the freedom from
students
 to study in their favourite
subject
. To recapitulate concerning all about facts we can clearly see, that the plan of admitting the same total of male and female recruitment at the academy level in each apt is not a good view and the admission should be strictly based on choice and worthiness rather rather than emotion.
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  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
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  • compromise on quality
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