Many people think that public libraries should only provide books and should not waste their money on expensive hi-tech media, such as softwares, DVDs or videos. Do you agree or disagree?

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people claim that
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several reasons to think that hi-tech
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, there are many reasons to put computers for studying in
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we should not forget about
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and how much useful
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