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The charts below give information about travel to and from the UK, and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit.

The charts below give information about travel to and from the UK, and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit.
#information #travel #uk #countries #residents #visit
The line graph
ilustrations
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illustrating
illustrations
 how many
people
visits
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visit
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to
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apply
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and from the
UK
since
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from
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 1979 till 1999,
whereas
, the bar chart
give
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gives
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 information about
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the
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most popular
countries
 (France, Spain,
USA
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the USA
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, Greece, and Turkey) visited by
UK
residents
1999
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in 1999
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. Unit are measured in
millions
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ofmillions
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people
.
Overall
,
visits
 abroad by
UK
residents
 accounted for largest
then
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than
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visits
 to the
UK
 by overseas
residents
 at the
begining
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beginning
 of
line
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the line
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 chart and it
upper
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apply
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double
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doubled
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in
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at
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 the end of
period
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the period
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 given.
While
 France and Spain made up the majority of
most
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the most
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 popular
countries
 visited by
UK
residents
1999
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in 1999
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, Turkey was
minority
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a minority
the minority
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,
other
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and other
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countries
 (USA, and Greece) comprised of
average
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the average
an average
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 count of
people
. With regards to the line graph, the amount of
people
visits
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visited
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oversea
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overseas
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 by
UK
 citizens started at
aproximately
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approximately
 11
millions
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million
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people
 in the first year,
gradual
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gradually
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 grew to more than five times.
Likewise
, come to see
th
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that
 the
UK
 by other
countries
people
 increased only more than twice from 10
millions
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million
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 to nearly 28
millions
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million
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 visitors.
One
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On
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 the other hand≤, in the case of
bar
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the bar
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 graph first of all France
then
 Spain
was
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were
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 major
countries
 where
UK
 citizens visited in 1999, at the same time only
quarter
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a quarter
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of
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UK
residents
 visited Turkey, and about 4 and 3
millions
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million
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 visitors
was
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were
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 in the USA and Greece respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, visits, uk, countries, residents, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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