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It is sometimes said that countries should produce all the food for their populations to eat and import as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is sometimes believed that producing all the
food
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 for the citizens is necessary for citizens to eat in many nations
as well as
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 importing should be spent little on.
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 essay strongly agrees with
this
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 suggestion for several reasons
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 as the career opportunities and the
countries
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 in the future. The first argument given to support my opinion is that the unemployment rate will be decreased .
This
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 is true because if the
countries
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 produce all the
food
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 by themselves, they need more workers.
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 will provide citizens with the opportunity to have careers.
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, producing
food
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 in the
countries
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 can help the government manage the quality of products.
As a result
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, residents will purchase or export local
food
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instead
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 of importing foods. Take Vietnam as an example, because of their healthy diet, people tend to produce vegetables for their family. Another point behind my belief is that the
countries
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' economies will rise. The reason for
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 is that reducing imported
food
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 and concentrating on exporting will allow many national businesses to have more chances of developing.
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 enables the economy of
countries
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 to increase.
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, importing
food
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 which is reduced is beneficial to the environment because of the carbon dioxide.
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, in the USA, the US dollar to date is considered to be the most powerful currency because exporting has a surplus than importing. In conclusion, I totally agree that all the
food
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 should be produced in the
countries
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instead
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 of
importing
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imported
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 because
the
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of the
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 employment
ratee
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rate
rates
 and the development of
country
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the country
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 given the aforementioned arguments.

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task achievement
Provide more detailed and diverse examples to strengthen your points, rather than relying on just a couple of nations.
coherence cohesion
Proofread your work to avoid small grammatical errors, such as 'ratee' instead of 'rate'.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are clear and well-formed, giving a good framework for your argument.
task achievement
You identified two main arguments and developed them logically throughout the essay.

Your opinion

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