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Nowadays, more and more people are moving from the countryside to cities, which are becoming overcrowded. What are the reasons for this movement to cities and what are the effects?

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No one can deny that some
people
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 believe that when they go to
cities
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 in which to change their life ,
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 : to get a job, a modern home and to eat different food
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 others prefer to guess that they had sated in the countryside. From my point of outlook, I hold an identical opinion to the statement and an array of reasons with be elaborated on as follows. There are many reasons is that
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 have moved to the
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.
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 of main the reason is carries ,
people
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 need jobs when they go to
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 who will get a variety of carries.
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, they will decide to stay in the city, which they leave their village an end.
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, another reason is students. The pupils will want to complete their studies because their villages are not there the college and the University.
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, they will move to the
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 to learn at different universities.
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, there are some negative effects when individuals stay in the city. The most major effect is pollution, it means that the increasing population of
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. In the words, the
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 will become dirty or waste.
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, the students who come to the village to study will want to hostel, so the reading increase is another effect.
To sum up
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, based on the aforementioned, even though some
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 hold an opposite opinion toward the statement, from my point of view, I support those who have moved to the city for their future because in the
cities
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 have more of a different chance in working and will change their life
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