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The line chart shows exports in billions of dollars.

The line chart shows exports in billions of dollars.
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The line chart depicts the
Australian
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 exports in billions of dollars in four wide countries of the world over 22 years.
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, the rate of
Australian
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 exporting from China rose dramatically over a time period coinciding with a moderate decrease in the number of exports to Japan and the US .
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 the exportation percentage of India was stagnant ,
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 that fluctuation in the US during the period . The proportion of
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 exports to China started out at a tiny fraction in 1990 which
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 continued to increase gradually until a sharp growth from slightly above 10% in 2005 to approximately 25% in 2010 as it reached almost 27% in 2012. The exportation rate from Australia to India was at a plateau from 1990 to 2000
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 it rose dramatically to about 7% in 2010 and a slight drop to well under 10% in 2012 The percentage of exported goods from Australia to Japan was at around 26% in 1990 before it experienced a downward trend over the time period until it was almost 18% in 2012
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 the
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 goods sent to the US experienced some fluctuations until it decreased gradually to reach around 5% in 2010 and it rose marginally to approximately 7% in 2012

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australian with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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