You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Young people in the modern world seem to have more power and influence than any previous young generation. Why is this the case? What impact does this have on the relationship between old and young people? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

Nowadays,
technology
is increasing so young
people
in the modern world seem to have more
power
and
influence
than any previous young
generation
.
this
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have
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has
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an
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a
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great impact on the relationship between old and young
people
.
Firstly
, As
technology
is
increased
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increasing
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in
same
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the same
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ways young are becoming more
power
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powerful
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and
influence
.
For example
, a person
with age
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aged
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35
have
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has
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more information about history but
the a
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the
a
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person
with age
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aged
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25
have
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has
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more
knowledge
and
expercience
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experience
about
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in
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tehnology
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technology
.
However
,
young
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the young
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generation
should teach
old
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the old
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generation
as well old
genration
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generation
should give
knowledge
about history to
new
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a new
the new
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generation
.
Hence
,
both
should understand each other.
Thus
,
both
have great
knowledge
. Government should
encouagre
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encourage
both
old
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the old
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generation
and
new
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a new
the new
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generation
.
Old
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The old
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generation
have
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has
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good
expercience
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experience
and
young
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the young
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genration
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generation
have good
knowledge
.
Secondly
, From my own
knowledge
and experience the the main reason for
this
case is development in
technology
.
For example
, young
people
watch T.V., video,
vlogs
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and vlogs
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and
reading
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read
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a lot
from
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on
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internet
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the internet
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which give them
power
and
influence
them a lot.
Thirdly
, There is a great impact
own
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on
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relationship
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the relationship
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between old and young
people
in
both
ways
advantage
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advantages
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as well as
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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. Not only
It have
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has it
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become hard for
old
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the old
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genration
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generation
to learn about new things but
also
for
young
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the young
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its become hard to live without
technology
.
For
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From
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my own
experience
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,experience
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I have seen that it has been
diffecult
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difficult
for
old
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the old
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generation
manage
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to manage
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with new
generation
.
To conclude
, Old
people
are
connet
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connected
to history and
young
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the young
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generation
are more
connted
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connected
towardes
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towards
modern world
seem
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and seem
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to have more
power
and
influence
than any previous young
generation
.
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