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The graph bellow shows the number of visitors to three museums between 2000 and 2010.

The graph bellow shows the number of visitors to three museums between 2000 and 2010.
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The graph reveals the numerical value of visitors to the museum between 2000 to 2005. The units are measured based on annual entries in millions.
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, the graph illustrates that every year there is a surge in the number of people in the
three
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museums
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, especially in the National, China. As is presented in the chart, among the
three
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museums
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, China's museum growth is remarkable touching nearly 16
million
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 in 2005 from 6
million
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 in 2000. It is crystal clear that from the year ,2000 all
three
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museums
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 have maintained their visitors with a minimum of 6
million
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 annually.
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, the MET and Edo
museums
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 attracted more travellers at the beginning of the twenty-first century and plunged to below 10
million
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 visitors in 2002.
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 the data shown in the chart, Edo-Tokyo reduced the number of foreigners from nearly 14
million
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 to below 10
million
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. In conclusion, the
three
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museums
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 are working their best to attract world tourists after the year 2003.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words three, museums, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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