The tow maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010

The tow maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010
The maps show the various
changes
at the city hospital over 3 years from 2007 to 2010.
Overall
it can be seen that, the majority of the
changes
occurred in three specific area: a new
bus
station
, two roundabouts, and a separate
car
paek for public access. The maps show the various
changes
at the city hospital over 3 years from 2007 to 2010.
Overall
it can be seen that, the majority of the
changes
occurred in three specific area: a new
bus
station
, two roundabouts, and a separate
car
park
for public access.
To begin
with, in 2007, three
bus
stops were presented on either
side
of Hospital
Road
.
However
, these were removed in 2010, and a new
bus
station
was established on the west
side
of Hospital
Road
.
Moreover
, to access the
bus
station
, two new roundabouts were constructed - the first located at the intersection of City
Road
and Hospital
Road
, and the second one is
at the end
of the Hospital
Road
, connecting to the Ring
Road
.
Furthermore
, the maps highlight modifications made to parking areas used by staff and visitors. In 2007, the same
car
park
was used by both staff and visitors, situated on the eastern
side
of Hospital
Road
and accessible via the Ring
Road
.
However
, by 2010, the original
car
park
was designed for the staff only, and the new
car
park
was established on the eastern
side
of the ring
road
to accommodate public parking.
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