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The tow maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010

The tow maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010
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The maps show the various
changes
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 at the city hospital over 3 years from 2007 to 2010.
Overall
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 it can be seen that, the majority of the
changes
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 occurred in three specific area: a new
bus
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station
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, two roundabouts, and a separate
car
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 paek for public access. The maps show the various
changes
Use synonyms
 at the city hospital over 3 years from 2007 to 2010.
Overall
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 it can be seen that, the majority of the
changes
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 occurred in three specific area: a new
bus
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station
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, two roundabouts, and a separate
car
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park
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 for public access.
To begin
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 with, in 2007, three
bus
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 stops were presented on either
side
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 of Hospital
Road
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.
However
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, these were removed in 2010, and a new
bus
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station
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 was established on the west
side
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 of Hospital
Road
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.
Moreover
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, to access the
bus
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station
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, two new roundabouts were constructed - the first located at the intersection of City
Road
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 and Hospital
Road
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, and the second one is
at the end
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 of the Hospital
Road
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, connecting to the Ring
Road
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.
Furthermore
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, the maps highlight modifications made to parking areas used by staff and visitors. In 2007, the same
car
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park
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 was used by both staff and visitors, situated on the eastern
side
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 of Hospital
Road
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 and accessible via the Ring
Road
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.
However
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, by 2010, the original
car
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park
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 was designed for the staff only, and the new
car
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park
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 was established on the eastern
side
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 of the ring
road
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 to accommodate public parking.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, overall".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words changes, bus, station, car, park, side, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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