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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to but things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #attention
Advertisement is an effective method to launch a
product
 to captivate the attention of consumers or make them keen to buy that
product
. Some
people
 argue that advertising is hugely impacted by persuading us to purchase the stuff.
Whereas
 others think that advertisement is likely familiar that we could no longer pay attention to it. I would like to explain more regarding
this
 resolution and give the details from both sides. Advertising either the new
products
 or re-branding
products
 are really demanding, nowadays. Appealing advertisements could engage psychologically for viewers to buy the
products
, especially if the brand ambassador of the
products
 is their favourite artist.
Consequently
,
people
 will buy without in-depth thinking especially when it comes to a flash sale. Meanwhile, the
products
 could be not staple foods
such
 as diet supplements that might directly affect their health.
Hence
, consumers appear to have misleading perceptions about that
product
. Apart from that, commercial breaks have a massive advantage which
also
 assists the company in re-branding their
products
.
Also
, creating a job vacancy for talented
people
 who are passionate about market requirements. In the end, those conditions will boost the gross domestic
product
 (GDP) as an indicator of the economy nationally that indicates the number of laid-off slightly does not exist anymore. All in all, advertising has a positive and negative impact on the way
people
 think. The advantages are helping re-brand the
product
 and increase the national gross domestic
product
 (GDP), meanwhile, it could
also
 lead to miss-perception for some critical
products
 and consumerism as well.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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