The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013.

Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.
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This
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bar chart depicts three global mobiles: Samsung, Apple, Nokia,
LG
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and
ZTE
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sales
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in three period: 2009, 2011 and 2013. It is clear from the graph that there two big companies that represent higher number of
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for all the years.
According to
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what is shown,
LG
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and
ZTE
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account for the same range of
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for the whole periods. In terms of the
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of
LG
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and
ZTE
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mobiles,
LG
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sales
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between 70,000 and 120,000
phone
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during
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years,
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ZTE
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did not sale more than 60,000 in 2013
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they could bay a 50,000
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in 2009. Apple’s
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on the other hand
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, they sale around 90,000 in 2011 and 150,000 in 2013, but in 2009 they recorded the lowest number of
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in the first interval of
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graph by just almost 30 thousand device.
To sum up
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, we could say that Samsung and Nokia’s
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are higher than about 240 for all the period and Samsung in 2013 sale around 450
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,
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the
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of Nokia’
phone
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in the same year represent 250.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words lg, zte, sales, phone with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "represent" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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