The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013.

Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.
This
bar chart depicts three global mobiles: Samsung, Apple, Nokia,
LG
and
ZTE
sales
in three period: 2009, 2011 and 2013. It is clear from the graph that there two big companies that represent higher number of
sales
for all the years.
According to
what is shown,
LG
and
ZTE
account for the same range of
sales
for the whole periods. In terms of the
sales
of
LG
and
ZTE
mobiles,
LG
sales
between 70,000 and 120,000
phone
during
this
years,
while
ZTE
did not sale more than 60,000 in 2013
however
they could bay a 50,000
phone
in 2009. Apple’s
sales
on the other hand
, they sale around 90,000 in 2011 and 150,000 in 2013, but in 2009 they recorded the lowest number of
sales
in the first interval of
this
graph by just almost 30 thousand device.
To sum up
, we could say that Samsung and Nokia’s
sales
are higher than about 240 for all the period and Samsung in 2013 sale around 450
phone
,
while
the
sales
of Nokia’
phone
in the same year represent 250.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words lg, zte, sales, phone with synonyms.
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