The chart below shows changes in three different areas of crime in manchester city centre from 2003 to 2012.

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line graph illustrates 3 different types of crime rates in Manchester city centre in

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, we can see that the number of reports of Burglary and Car theft is higher than Robbery.

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, For Car theft, the rate started

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less than 2,500 in 2003

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faced a fluctuation until 2008. After that, the trend gradually rose to 2,800 in 2012.

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, there was a different behaviour in Burglary. Despite the upward trend in the first year and second year which was a peak of all records, the records significantly dipped down from more than 3800 and hit the lowest point in 2008 at about 1100. The records increased a little bit to around 1500 in 2009

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remained the same until 2012.

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there were many changes in Burglary and Car theft the behaviour in Robbery did not change much. The highest point of

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type was in 2005 around 1000

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was a fluctuation for 7 years to 2012.

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