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The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city center from 2003-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city center from 2003-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart gives information about the changing
ratio
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 of crimes in
the
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inner Newport
city
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 between 2003 to 2012 in 3 different types of crimes (
burglary
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,
car
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theft
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 and robbery).
Overall
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, the
proptions
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proportions
proportion
 undergo numerous changes . The percentage of
burglary
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was
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significantly decreased in the given period,
while
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car
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theft
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 and
bobbery
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robbery
ones
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stayed sustainably. In the case of
burglary
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,the
number
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 of incidents was
abot
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about
 3500, which was increased to
near
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nearly
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 4000 in 2004, which was the
highes
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highest
 report of that time. After that,
the
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burglary
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 crime
was
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significantly declined and rich
it's
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its
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least
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lowest
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number
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 in 2008, with just over 1000 incidents. Between 2008 and 20012, the
number
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 of
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burglary
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burglaries
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 had some fluctuation, with almost similar numbers in 2008 and 2012, with about 1500. The
ratio
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 of
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theft
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thefts
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 from the person was almost 500 in 2003, which was the
least
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lowest
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number
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 in that given period,
while
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 the
ratio
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 of
car
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theft
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 was five
time
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times
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 more
that
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than
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robbery
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robberies
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 with approximately 3000. In the next two
following
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years, the
number
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 of
robbery was
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robberies
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 gradually rose,
while
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 the
number
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 of
car
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theft
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thefts
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was
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gradually declined with around 1000 and 2700 respectively. Between 2006 and 2007, the
car
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theft
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ratio
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over took
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overtook
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 the
burglary
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 rate at about 2000. For the next 5 years, both numbers had some fluctuations, but they
follow
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followed
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 a similar trend and stayed
in
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at
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 almost 500 and 3000, just similar
the
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to the
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fist
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first
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 year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ratio, burglary, car, theft, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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