The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city center from 2003-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city center from 2003-2012. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart gives information about the changing
ratio
of crimes in
the
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inner Newport
city
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between 2003 to 2012 in 3 different types of crimes (
burglary
,
car
theft
and robbery).
Overall
, the
proptions
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proportions
proportion
undergo numerous changes . The percentage of
burglary
was
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significantly decreased in the given period,
while
car
theft
and
bobbery
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robbery
ones
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stayed sustainably. In the case of
burglary
,the
number
of incidents was
abot
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about
3500, which was increased to
near
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4000 in 2004, which was the
highes
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highest
report of that time. After that,
the
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burglary
crime
was
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significantly declined and rich
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its
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least
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lowest
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number
in 2008, with just over 1000 incidents. Between 2008 and 20012, the
number
of
burglary
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burglaries
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had some fluctuation, with almost similar numbers in 2008 and 2012, with about 1500. The
ratio
of
theft
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thefts
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from the person was almost 500 in 2003, which was the
least
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lowest
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number
in that given period,
while
the
ratio
of
car
theft
was five
time
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times
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more
that
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than
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robbery
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robberies
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with approximately 3000. In the next two
following
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years, the
number
of
robbery was
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robberies
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gradually rose,
while
the
number
of
car
theft
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thefts
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was
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gradually declined with around 1000 and 2700 respectively. Between 2006 and 2007, the
car
theft
ratio
over took
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the
burglary
rate at about 2000. For the next 5 years, both numbers had some fluctuations, but they
follow
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followed
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a similar trend and stayed
in
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at
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almost 500 and 3000, just similar
the
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to the
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fist
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first
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year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words ratio, burglary, car, theft, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.

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