The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and

amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between

1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make comparisons where relevant.
The two given line charts present the changes in the number of electrical appliances owned by
families
in a specific area and the amount of time each family spent on housework on a weekly basis between 1920 and 2019.
Overall
, all categories of electrical appliances experienced an upward trajectory throughout the entire period, leading to a simultaneous decline in the amount of time spent on housework by every family. In 1920, almost 0% of
families
owned a refrigerator.
However
, with the advancement of technology, the number of
families
with a fridge increased significantly in the following 60 years, reaching its peak in 1980 at 100%. In the next 20 years, the proportion of households owning a refrigerator remained consistently at 100%. Correspondingly, the percentage of
families
that had a washing machine and a vacuum cleaner in 1920 was higher than the rate of fridge ownership, accounting for approximately 40% and 30% respectively. Unlike the increasing trend in the number of
families
with a vacuum cleaner, which reached 100% in 2000, the percentage of washing
machine
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met a slight downward trend from 1960 to 1980, with the ownership rate reaching 63%.
Afterward
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, the percentage of that increased at a slower pace and reached about 74% in 2019.
Additionally
,
due to
the increase in the use of these electrical appliances, the amount of time people spent on housework decreased significantly over the 100-year period, from 50 hours per week to only 10 hours per week.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words families with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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