Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that any cities in the world are now "one big traffic" How true do you think this statement is? What measures can government take to discourage people from using their cars.

Over the
last
few
decades
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there has been a tremendous amount of people questioning
traffic
jams in the cities around the world. It is indisputable that
these
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traffics are
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traffic is
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caused by overwhelming car ownership.
Thus
, a myriad of infrastructural changes and strategic marketing plans should be implemented by
governments
in order to solve the
above mentioned
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challenge.
Firstly
, it has to be mentioned that nowadays car ownership is more a social demand, rather than
necessity
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. Despite the fact that municipal infrastructure, including city
bus
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buses
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, metro,
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and trolley
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trolley
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, is able to transfer citizens, people are more inclined to have their own cars.
This
action of people is mostly motivated by showing self-sufficiency for society.
Therefore
, excessive car ownership affects
traffic
congestion.
Secondly
,
according to
the World Health Organization, the world is facing unprecedented population increase and urbanization. Cities have become overcrowded anthills.
Consequently
, municipal roads, railways,
highways
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and highways
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demand an expansion every 2-3 years.
However
,
due to
the geometrical growth of population and cars,
governments
are not able to maintain infrastructure to meet the growing demand.
Traffic
problems require a systematic approach and strategic solution from municipal authorities. Particularly,
governments
should alter their focus on developing pedestrian facilities,
such
as bike roads, electronic bike systems, pedestrian zones, bus systems, and the metro. Relatedly, it has to be convenient, faster and cost-effective to utilize bus and bike systems in cities.
Moreover
, they should build a positive image of pedestrians, who are contributing to city development.
To sum up
, the
last
few decades can be described as a struggle
of
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governments
for
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reduction
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of
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apply
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traffic
jams.
This
trend is unarguable and
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have inevitable consequences unless plenty of systematic measures are implemented.
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